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Rural towns have some benefits because nature there is very beautiful (å°å ¥). However, I believe students should live in a large city because living in a large city is more convenient (Thesis). (30 words)
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解çäŸ 1
First, it is very convenient for students to live in a large town (Topic Sentence). There are a lot of people in a large town, so trains frequently reach stations. Therefore, if I miss a train in a large town, I can take another one in a minute. As a result, large cities are more convenient for students to live in. (59 words)
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First, it is very convenient for students to live in a large town. When I went to a rural town, transportation there was very inconvenient because the population in a small town is very low. However, there are a lot of people in a large town, so trains frequently reach stations. Therefore, if I miss a train in a large town, I can take another one in a minute. As a result, large cities are more convenient for students to live in (82 words).
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解çäŸ 3
First, students in a big city can have a better grade because it is very convenient for students to live in a large town. When I went to a rural town, transportation there was very inconvenient because the population in a small town is very low. However, there are a lot of people in a large town, so trains frequently reach stations. Therefore, if I miss a train in a large town, I can take another one in a minute. Consequently, students who live in a large town can save their transportation time to their school, and they can study for a longer time than students in a small town. As a result, students who live in a large town can get a higher academic grade (126 words).
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First, students in a big city can have a better grade because it is very convenient for students to live in a large town. When I went to a rural town, transportation there was very inconvenient because the population in a small town is very low. However, there are a lot of people in a large town, so trains frequently reach stations. Therefore, if I miss a train in a large town, I can take another one in a minute. Consequently, students who live in a large town can save their transportation time to their school, and they can study for a longer time than students in a small town. Furthermore (Moreover, In Addition), the study efficiency will also be increased because large town students will get less tired by the transportation. As a result, students who live in a large town can get a higher academic grade (145 words).
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Rural towns have some benefit because nature there is very beautiful. However, I believe students should live in a large city because they can have a better grade.
First, students in a big city can have a better grade because it is very convenient for students to live in a large town. When I went to a rural town, transportation there was very inconvenient because the population in a small town is very low. However, there are a lot of people in a large town, so trains frequently reach stations. Therefore, if I miss a train in a large town, I can take another one in a minute. Consequently, students who live in a large town can save their transportation time to their school, and they can study for a longer time than students in a small town. Furthermore (Moreover, In Addition), the study efficiency will also be increased because large town students will get less tired by the transportation. As a result, students who live in a large town can get a higher academic grade.
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